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P: UPON A HILL ACROSS THE BLUE LAKE by Chocomix

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First off I want to say this is just so lovely. :heart: It has such an amazing happy feel to it, yet relaxing with the fog.
From what I've seen of this character, you've captured her very well! But I think there's some things that could use a little improvement.
The thing that really stand out the most for me here is the horse is lacking detail and definition and looks really smooth and flat. Although smudging really is a personal decision for artists, often with every equine manipper having they're own style of smudging and preferred amount, I really think you smudged her too much here. Although details in the original horse stock are light, there was still so much you could have pulled out of it with a soft light airbrush or some form of detailing.
Another thing that kinda bugs me here is the tail, the beginning of the tail seems to be rested on the side of her butt rather than placed along the horse's tail bone, if you had erased a bit of it from the beginning it would have looked more natural. If you were trying to have the tail more flicked over to her side, I would recommend erasing the little line in the middle or the tail's arch, that's what make it look placed wrong, you also could have maybe put the tail more around the legs if you were trying to flick it around the side.
The hair itself looks very well painted, but I think it could use a few more shadows to create a more 'hairy' feel and could use a few fly aways and single strands here and there to make it look more loose and flowy.
The colour change is amazing, changing a white horse to any colour is often a difficulty most equine manippers struggle with, however you pulled it off very nicely.
The fog looks very natural considering it's hand painted, but it looks a little to 'soft'. Even though fog is very thing and fluffy, it still has some cloudy features to it, try using a fog/cloud filter on a separate layer and setting it to screen mode to get it more textured.
Now to stars.
Vision: 5 stars, you really pulled this character off nicely and the setting and theme is wonderful.
Originality: 4 1/2 stars, this is a theme I don't see often in equine manips, but I have seen it done before.
Technique: 4 stars, the manip is very well done, but the lack of detail bumped you down a lot, I think if you had defined the horse a bit more you could have gotten a full 5 stars.
Impact: 5 stars, I just absolutely LOVE the cheery yet relaxed feel of this whole manip.
Keep up the good work!
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Chocomix Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much for the critique hun! :tighthug: I tried my best with the recoloring because it really was hard, but I just wanted to pull it off correctly and fell in love with the horse and background stock and they just were meant for each other! So Ill try to improve on my detailing and I just didnt know how to detail it correctly without showing to much of the horses 'true' color. I spend at least three ours on highlighting and what so ever XD But through the process I learned a lot :) Thank you very much agIn and I am very happy that you like it! :heart:
Feel welcome to write as many crits as you want, I appreciate them more than it might seem.



That made my day :heart:
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NEFUR-STUDIOS Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome, I hope it helped! :iconsnuggleplz; For detailing, try using a soft light or overlay airbrush over the details of the colour changed layer with black and white, or make a new layer above it on a soft light and overlay setting and go over the muscles and what not, then lower the opacity to what feels right.
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Chocomix Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'll definitly remember this for next time, thanks! :D
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NEFUR-STUDIOS Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:3
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